Week #3 100 word challenge
One day i was walking to school i saw a dog but it seemed to be going backwards i guess i was wrong i was the one going in the opposite direction somehow i fell into an active volcano don't ask me how i did... It blew up it was very warm and then i woke up yeah it was just a weird dream thankfully but when i looked down i was in a burst of shooting lava maybe i should learn which direction i go in as i was floating i wondered HOW DID THIS HAPPEN story lesson don't trust volcano's.
Hello Dogemaster,
ReplyDeleteYour story is difficult to understand. Was it a dream or not?
Remember that the focus of today's lesson was to avoid repeating words in such a short piece of writing e.g. 'I' x 14! The word 'I' should always be capitalized. Keep on writing and learning.
Sincerely,
Mrs. Van
Or was it your sense of direction that you shouldn't trust?!
ReplyDeleteI would have liked to have 'entered' the scene in your writing more than I did, but was confused trying to decipher where the sentences were. Please try to use capitals for each sentence beginning and I'm sure you know this - full stops at the end?
Thanks for sharing,
Jackie (team 100WC_
New Zealand